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Underneath the calm, smooth surface
Still as death, cold as ice
Lies a current running fiercely
Hidden, out of sight
Thoughts and feelings running rampant
Torrent of emotion
Don't fall in, you'll sink too deep
Drown in one quick motion

My heart is a Swamp of Sorrows
Hiding what it truly feels
On the surface, at ease
Only to please
Those who see me thus
A hypocrite, a liar
Preaching truth and honesty
But when will I drink my own poison
Feel the pain of my own bite?
©2007-2009 ~EvanescentPhantom
:iconevanescentphantom:

Author's Comments

Okay, so recently I've been writing random snippets of poetry and getting my feelings down in a medium that I connect with. Seeing as I suck at composing music, this is the next best thing. :D

Alright, translation, if you'd care for it; Basically, I have a lot within me that I pen up and keep hidden, for the sake of myself and everyone around me. When I show the slightest bit of sadness, all of my close friends freak and try to figure out what's wrong (you know who you are. =P). I'm also afraid to deal with it all, because if I "dip my foot in the water," it's easy for me to "fall in and sink too deep," giving way to deeper emotions that I might not necessarily want out at the time.

I always tell my friends, and anyone I give advice to in general, to be true to themselves, and to not keep things bottled up. To deal with their problems, slay their dragons. But I'm hypocritical in that sense, and I wonder; when will I keep so much bottled up that I explode and do something I'll really regret?

Comments appreciated, criticisms will be carefully considered, and flames will be laughed at and encourage further equal-quality poetry, possibly about aforementioned flaming. You've been warned. ;)

~Phantom

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:iconxhisfallenangel:
Wow...that's really pretty...
:iconevanescentphantom:
Aww, why thank you. I do try, you know. :P

--
Worry not about your flaws in character, for I assure you mine are still greater.

Yes, I've found Jesus. I sent him careening down a staircase last night.

Oh my Goddess, a congregation of seagulls!
:iconrei11ayanamae:
:D I am booooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooo
oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooo
oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooored.......

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:pride: :3
:iconevanescentphantom:
What the heck?! -cries Emo tears of da sadness!-

:P

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Worry not about your flaws in character, for I assure you mine are still greater.

Yes, I've found Jesus. I sent him careening down a staircase last night.

Oh my Goddess, a congregation of seagulls!
:iconrei11ayanamae:
emo tears? lol XP

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:pride: :3
:iconjdfreak:
That's beautiful...

You should check out the poem I recently put onto DA. And yes, I'll gratefully accept any criticisms you may have at the point you read it.

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"I'm a gambler, a farmboy, and I'm here to take command of your bloody army!" - Mat Cauthon
:iconjdfreak:
Never mind about the poem. I took it off. I'll show it to you later.

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"I'm a gambler, a farmboy, and I'm here to take command of your bloody army!" - Mat Cauthon

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